Oh, I'm sorry...I wasn't aware that Leo Tolstoy was a member of this forum. Thank you for your professional writing critiques. I truly value your opinion, given your professional experience as an author. I mean, not just anyone can come up with priceless gems like "Once upon a time, long, long ago, in a galaxy far, far away..." I've never heard
that before.
Where do you come up this stuff?!?!? Man, if only the rest of us could have access to your genius.
Anyway, enough of the sarcasm. All you have basically done since I threw in my original addition (of Jesus having a boner - in the other story game thread) is whine. Why? Oh, I know why...because you're not happy with what I have written. The story in the other thread didn't go the way YOU wanted it to go, so you threw a temper tantrum, opened up a story game thread of your own and then basically told me not to post in it. You didn't want any "shenanigans", as you called it.
Well, I just gave you something that was clearly
not shenanigans, but you're
still complaining? Now my addition didn't have enough detail? That's your problem? Come on, man. You can't be serious. I'm sorry I didn't include the picturesque vision of "Once upon a time, long, long ago, in a galaxy far, far away..." like you did. Now
that is just loooooaded with detail.
And, if what I have written didn't make the story clear, then why don't you use your expert analysis and make the necessary additions? I mean, such a wordsmith as yourself should have
no problem figuring out how to continue on with "Then, one day, he spotted something off in the distance."
But, I'll appease your frustration and give you some more detail, ok? Alright, so here we go. After this, the ball is in your court...
"Then, at 4:12AM on April 13, 2057, he saw the dead body of a friend he had known from high school, named Gerard P. Monkeynuggets III, who was wearing black Levi's 501 jeans (size 38/32), a faded purple hoodless sweatshirt with a picture of a horribly diseased cow riding a skateboard which was apparently made of feces, with the words 'CowaDUNGa' printed across the chest, and a pair of Mickey Mouse ears exactly 3,487.2935839 meters off in the distance."